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PostSubject: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   11th March 2013, 6:05 pm

Alright, this is a story idea that has been swimming in my head for some time now and wouldn't let up until I started writing it down. The story takes place in anime continuity while introducing some manga elements that were never in the anime (the Sailor Quarter obviously being one of them). Feedback is allowed. This is my first time writing anything Sailor Moon related so I would appreciate all the help I can get. Thank you. Enjoy.






Chapter One
Pretty in Pink
A cloud formed in the night's sky above a large park in Tokyo, Japan. The park was empty at this hour with a gentle breeze blowing through the leaves on the trees nearby before it grew stronger and a flash of light engulfed the area. The paws of a gray cat with magenta eyes landed perfectly against the soil from its fall while the one to come after came crashing down with a large splash in the nearby lake. The feline sighed as the young woman with long pink hair and red eyes swam to shore. She stood up to her feet and ran both hands through her long hair that ran down pass her shoulders, shaking her hair and body to get some of the water off before straightening up.

“Are you all right?” asked the cat.

“I'm fine,” replied the girl. “Just never could get that landing right. Let's figure out where we are.”

The girl and her cat started to walk, taking the golden key that was dangling around her neck on a necklace and concealing it underneath her shirt as they did so. Her eyes remembering certain images from when she was a kid but it wasn't until she spotted a sign that said “Juuban Park” that she was certain this was the right place.

“All right!” exclaimed the girl. “We're in the right place. Come on, Diana, I remember the way home from here.”

The pair left the park and began walking down the pavement, eventually making their way to a two-story surrounded by a white and pink fence. The teenager ran an index finger across the gold plate on the fence that had the words “Tsukino Residence” engraved on it. A smile curved her lips as many fond memories instantly came back upon reading the plate before she pushed the fence door open and walked towards the main entrance of the house. The house itself was white, a red roof at the top, a brown door at the front with a single window and two balconies up above on the second floor where the owners of the home and their children slept. The girl ranged the doorbell and then waited alongside her cat for someone to answer.

“I hope we didn't wake them,” said Diana.

“I don't think they'll mind,” replied the girl. “And the one that would could sleep through an earthquake.”

The sounds of footsteps coming down the stairs could be heard from the other side of the door, a light turned on and shined through the window prior to the door being unlocked and opened slightly. Tired brown eyes peaked out from the other side of the crack and surprise filled them while the door came open in full and a purple-headed woman stood across the threshold from the younger girl, the older of which appearing to have been shaken from her slumber at the sound of the doorbell.

“Chibiusa?” asked the older woman.

“Ikuko-mama!” cried Chibiusa.

Chibiusa embraced the older woman, her arms wrapped around her tightly as she was overtaken by joy from seeing Ikuko after being away for so long. Ikuko was still too shocked by the unannounced arrival in the middle of the night to respond, but she had missed the little pink haired girl who used to live with them all those years ago, as much as the little girl has missed them. Chibiusa unwrapped her arms from Ikuko and Ikuko welcomed her and Diana inside before closing and locking the door behind them.

“It's so good to see you again,” said Chibiusa taking off her shoes.

“It good to see you too,” replied Ikuko. “Is there a reason you've chosen to visit at the middle of the night? You could have called at least.”

“Sorry! I didn't mean to wake you. My uh... 'flight' arrived late and I was kind of in a hurry. If it's not too much trouble can I spend the night?”

“Of course you can. Your old room is still intact.”

“I'll try not to wake Shingo.”

“You won't have to worry about that.”

“No?”

“Shingo is off to college and Usagi is on her honeymoon and set to move in with Mamoru. It's just me and Kenji now.”

“So much has changed here.”

“Well, it has been a while. Are you doing something new with your hair?”

“Huh?”

“You're wearing it down.”

Chibiusa blinked and brought her hand through her hair again and remembered that it hasn't been made.

“Oh! No. I just haven't gotten around to making it yet. I'll do it in the morning.”

“I like it. You look very beautiful with it down.”

“T-thank you!” said Chibiusa as a small blush appeared around her cheeks.

“Off to bed now. It's late.”

Chibiusa nodded her head and proceeded up the stairs with Diana into her old room. She was happy to see that not much has changed with it. The walls were white like most everything else in the house, there was a small desk to the left side of the room where she talked to Pegasus often as a child and then her bed positioned right in front of the window giving her a view of the stars. Everything was exactly as she had left it.

“It's good to be back,” Chibiusa said to herself more than anything.

Chibiusa plopped down on the bed and laid down against it, folding her arms underneath her head as she looked outside the window at the stars and crescent moon above. Diana joined her on the bed and walked up to her side before breaking the momentary silence that came since Chibiusa's last sentence, “Are you sure it's a good idea to spend the night here? The Queen said if we don't hurry your guardians could be lost forever.”

“We still have plenty of time,” replied Chibiusa. “Besides, it's better to wait til morning. I can contact the others to help us.”

“If you say so.”

Chibiusa yawned and turned to her closing her eyes.

“Goodnight, Diana.”

“Goodnight, Chibiusa.”





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Inside the cave of Mt. Fuji was an altar made of ice and behind that altar was a small figure concealed in black priest robes with gold outlines on the outside on a throne of ice, his face completely hidden from view. The space all around the altar was occupied by people bowing at the altar chanting, “Chaos!” repeatedly. Three taller robed figures approached the altar where the central hooded figure sat, dressed in red robes instead of black. Their hands inside their sleeves which were pressed against each other. They stood around the altar in order to protect the black hooded figure that sat behind it one to the left, one to the right and the third directly in front.

“Praise be to Chaos!” said the cloaked figure at the front of the altar. “The one who never became a star. The ruler of the Galaxy Cauldron. Reject the Light of Hope in your heart and embrace Chaos.”

The people who gathered around the altar began to cry out praises to Chaos, the speaker before them now holding up his hand and waving it through the air as images of earth appeared like a TV screen out in front of them. Flashing from frame to frame narrowing itself down to the Juuban district of Tokyo.

“She is here,” the cloaked figure continued, “we, the Three Wisemen, can sense her presence.”

“She must not be allowed to complete her mission,” said the second Wiseman, standing to the right of the figure in black.

“But she could be anyone,” said the third standing opposite of the second. “Any face.”

“Then we will purge the women of Japan,” said the first Wiseman.

The first Wiseman waved his hand again and images of Juuban Japan dispersed through the air, passing an elderly looking man who had stepped out from the crowd of worshipers. He was mostly bald except for a streak of gray hair on the left and right side of his head and a beard to match. Brown eyes that have seen centuries of war stared firmly on the ground in front of him as he was in a kneel, his head bowed before the three Wisemen.

“You will go to Juuban and begin the purge,” said the first Wiseman. “Father Iscariot.”

“Yes, my Lords,” replied the priest.

Iscariot stood up to his feet and turned around, disappearing into the crowd of worshipers to begin his task.





****
Chibiusa opened up Usagi's closet upon entering the blonde's now unused room and pulled out one of her outfits to change into. After doing so red eyes wandered over to the bed and a curiosity came over her as she looked under the bed to find a collection of magazines owned by Rei. Chibiusa grabbed them and pulled them out from under the bed as she stood up and looked them over.

“All these years and she still hasn't returned them,” said Chibiusa.

The smell of freshly cooked ramen drifted up into the room and caused Chibiusa's nose to flare as she dropped the magazines and hurried down the stairs nearly running over Diana on the way.

“Sorry!” Chibiusa yelled while passing her by.

“Why did she have to have her mother's stomach?”

Chibiusa entered the dining room, feet running across the yellow tiles and coming to a stop at the brown dining room table with a lamp directly above it and multiple windows around it bringing in more light from the morning's sun. A man in a suit and tie with short black hair, brown eyes and a pair of black glasses were seated at the head of the table with a newspaper in hand. He lowered the paper and looked up to Chibiusa greeting her with a smile, “Good morning!”

“Kenji-papa!”

Chibiusa wrapped her arms around Kenji's neck from where he sat while Ikuko came in with plates in hand setting them down on the table.

“Breakfast is ready,” she said.

“Ah, it looks so delicious,” said Chibiusa.

Chibiusa sat down at the table and began digging in as Ikuko turned to face Diana who had just entered the dining room.

“Don't think I forgot about you,” said Ikuko placing a bowl down for Diana.

“So how long will you be visiting?” asked Kenji.

“A couple of days, maybe longer,” answered Chibiusa.

“You know you're welcome to stay as long as you'd like,” said Ikuko. “We always enjoy having you around.”

“Thank you!” replied Chibiusa.

Kenji looked at his watch and was surprised to see what time it was as he stood up from his seat.

“I'm starting to become like Usagi,” he began, “I'm going to be late for work. Bye, hon.”

Kenji kissed his wife goodbye and waved at Chibiusa on his way out of the dining room. Ikuko pulled up a chair and sat across from Chibiusa who were still enjoying her food.

“I'm taking a trip to the Shopping Center today if you wanted to come,” said Ikuko. “I saw this beautiful pink dress the other day that I think would look lovely on you.”

“I'd love to go!” said Chibiusa excitedly.

“Meow!” interjected Diana from her place on the floor.

“Hush, Diana,” mumbled Chibiusa.

“Great. We'll go after breakfast.”

They finished breakfast and made their way out of the house. The three had barely crossed the threshold out the main entrance when Ikuko noticed that Chibiusa's hair was still being worn down.

“Don't you want to make your hair first?” asked Ikuko.

“I thought I would wear it down today,” answered Chibiusa.

Ikuko looked at Chibiusa for a moment and then just smiled before the two were on their way to the Juuban shopping district. The shopping center itself consisted of a large open space with various shops next to each other, from the jewelry store owned by Naru's mother to the Game Center arcade. Everything was peaceful, perhaps the most peaceful it has ever been. Chibiusa knew just looking around at the people, that it was because of Sailor Moon and the Sailor Senshi. She smiled knowingly, hoping that she would meet up with the others soon for old time sake.

“Here it is!” exclaimed Ikuko.

Chibiusa looked over to a window at the front of a dress store and saw a beautiful light pink gown like something out of a fairytale. She walked up to the glass window and gently rested a hand on it where the dress was being displayed from the other side, daydreaming of wearing it back home in Crystal Tokyo. It reminded her of her mother's dress but stood out all its own, just like her.

Those daydreams would end all too abruptly as Chibiusa saw a person being thrown on the other side of the displayed dress and quickly ran out of the way as the woman crashed through the glass window and hit the pavement hard knocking the dress stand over in her wake. Chibiusa and Ikuko rushed to the girl's side to see if she was okay, Chibiusa kneeling down to look her over more closely and bringing a hand over to her while asking, “Are you okay?” only for the woman to slap the hand away.

“Back off!”

Chibiusa was taken by surprise at the rude behavior from the woman, returning to her feet and backing away from the stranger. The woman in question then jumped back through the window and began fighting with the other women inside over the dress on display. The sound of two cars ramming into each other could be heard across the streets and when Chibiusa, Ikuko and Diana looked in that direction they saw two drivers leaving their cars and exchanged blows with one another.

“What on earth is going on?” questioned Ikuko in shock.

“I have no idea,” began Chibiusa, “but I think we better–”

Chibiusa was cut off by a woman's scream heard from around the corner at the end of the street they were on. Something was seriously wrong, Chibiusa could sense it in her gut. But what?

“Ikuko-mama, take Diana back to the house I'll go get the police.”

“I can't leave you out here by yourself it's too dangerous–!”

“I'll be fine, Ikuko-mama. Trust me. Go.”

Chibiusa turned to face Diana and petted her lightly whispering, “Protect her,” before they went their separate ways. She made sure Ikuko was no longer in sight before running off in the direction the scream came from, stopping at the corner and peering around it to see a man in black priest robes wielding a scythe. Blood dripping off the blade and down by the corpse of a girl around Chibiusa's age. She covered her mouth with her right hand and looked away, back pressed up against the wall and out of view as two police cars pulled up in front of the priest, both officers aiming their guns at the scythe-wielder.

“Freeze!” demanded the first police officer.

“Put down your weapon!” demanded the second.

Father Iscariot raised his free hand over the two officers and said, “Embrace Chaos!”

A stream of black energy shot out of the priest's palm, hitting the first officer in the chest before a part of the energy stream separated and formed a second one that hit the other police officer. Their eyes became pitch black after being hit and they turned their weapons on each other and fired. With no time to lose, Chibiusa ran into the nearby alley so nobody could see her transform before pulling out her transformation brooch shaped like a heart and crying out, “Moon Crisis, make up!”

At those words Chibiusa became engulfed in a pink light, her clothes were gone and in its place were pink ribbons that wrapped around her body taking the form of her Sailor Fuku. Her hair was lifted up and tied up in the iconic odango style of her family before the white wing-like barrettes and red odango covers appeared on it. Knee-high pink boots covered her feet and a golden tiara appeared on her forehead, both of which contained the crescent moon symbol and a pair of white gloves covered her hands. All of which took form in the time span of a few seconds as Super Sailor Chibimoon now stood in the place of Chibiusa.

Meanwhile, Father Iscariot kicked over the corpses of the police officers, looking down at their faces and examining them before speaking aloud, “How many more have to die before you show yourself?” He didn't believe any of the women he had killed was the warrior he was l searching for. If they were they would have at least tried to transform before his scythe ripped them apart. The priest wouldn't take more than two steps until the voice of another female called to him from the rooftop of the building above, “Stop right there!”

Iscariot came to a stop and looked up to see Sailor Chibimoon staring him down.

“What should have been remembered as a peaceful day with friends and family you have turned into a nightmare,” began Chibimoon, “for love and justice, I'm Sailor Chibimoon! And in the name of the future moon, I will punish you!”

Iscariot laughed, a dark laugh that caused Chibimoon to narrow her eyes over the man in black.

“What's so funny?” she asked.

“That you think this display is a nightmare,” answered Iscariot.

Chibimoon jumped down to the street below, landing behind the new enemy several feet away.

“Who are you?” asked Chibimoon. “What have you done to the people here?”

Iscariot only turned his head to address Chibimoon, “I am a priest of Chaos.”

“Chaos?”

“And you're in the way!”

Iscariot turned and advanced on Chibimoon's position, utilizing the reach of his scythe to where he only had to move half the number of steps a man with a smaller weapon would while releasing a barrage of well-organized slashes towards the Senshi. Chibimoon stumbled backward and fell out of the scythe's reach, quickly getting up to a knee and drawing her Pink Moon Stick aiming it at the enemy.

“Pink Sugar Heart Attack!”

The end of the Pink Moon Stick began to light up but to Chibimoon's dismay nothing happened as Iscariot continued to come at her leaving her on the defensive.

“That's all you have?” questioned Iscariot. “A broken stick!? I'm insulted!”

Chibimoon released a loud scream as the red hair pieces in her hair glowed allowing a sonic wave to amplify the screams causing the glass around them to shatter and threatening Father Iscariot's own eardrums. This gave the Senshi the chance she needed to collide into him with a Sailor Body Attack knocking Iscariot down to the ground, his scythe flying out of his hands and then restraining him on the ground.

“You were saying?” said Chibimoon.

“Let me go!” yelled Iscariot.

“Not until you tell me what you did to these people!”

“I have done nothing.”

“Liar!”

“I have done nothing but awakened what was already in their hearts!”

“What?”

“Chaos exist in the minds and hearts of every living being in the universe. Everyone, no matter how pure, is prone to Chaos. Even you!”

The same black energy that was used on the police officers jumped up from the priest's body onto Sailor Chibimoon's arms. Before she could do anything to stop it she froze in place, like being put into a trance, and her eyes turned black as the last words she heard were, “Embrace Chaos!”

The Senshi stood up to her feet and raised her Pink Moon Stick, “Pink Sugar Heart Attack!” a stream of pink heart fired from the stick into the already shattered glass of the building across from her knocking several civilians on the ground. She turned and repeated the attack towards the building on the opposite side, meanwhile Father Iscariot returned to his feet and reclaimed his scythe, gripping it tightly and now slowly stalking Chibimoon from behind. He lifted up his arms and raised the scythe's blade over head but before he could bring it down upon the Senshi a blinding white light filled up the area and blurred his vision. The dark priest shielded his eyes from the light and backed away as a great power could be felt settling in soon after. The people who have rioted in the stores and on the streets suddenly ceased their activities and Sailor Chibimoon came to, only to be blinded because of the light as well.

“Could it be?” questioned Iscariot.

Chibimoon saw a figure figure of a woman up ahead, long hair tied up in a similar fashion to her own with a cape and holding a staff in her right hand but was unable to make out much more than that. The mysterious figure turned around and shot up into the air only a few seconds before the light fading away. Still seeing spots from being blinded, Chibimoon turned around with her Moon Stick at the ready to resume fighting the dark priest but saw that he was nowhere to be found. Chibimoon then turned her attention over to the civilians that were injured, taking a step forward only to see them back away from her out of fear.

“It's okay. I'm not going to hurt you.”

But they didn't believe her and instead chose to run away while the Senshi was still trying to piece together what had just happened. She knew one thing for certain however, she couldn't stay here. Turning away from the people, Chibimoon ran off down the road and disappeared into the distance. She had only been back to the past for a day and already there was a new enemy threatening the people of Tokyo and a mysterious stranger surrounded by a white light. And there was just one word that kept replaying in the Senshi's mind.

Chaos.


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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   11th March 2013, 7:05 pm

I really enjoyed this! I loved the action!

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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   11th March 2013, 8:05 pm

Anjyu wrote:
I really enjoyed this! I loved the action!

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it Smile
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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   12th March 2013, 12:02 pm

Ahhh, I want more! I loved it, Tori! So exciting! ^^

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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   13th April 2013, 3:34 pm

You are very talented! The favorite for me was the interaction between the Tsukino's and Chibiusa^^ This is great work! The idea of Chaos having a priest is pretty awesome C:
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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   13th April 2013, 8:12 pm

Thank you to everyone who has taken the time to read and comment so far. I really appreciate the feedback Smile

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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   14th April 2013, 6:08 pm

Wow, post this one fanfiction.net! This is really good. =)
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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   14th April 2013, 7:11 pm

is that it so far?

I wanna know what happens next
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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   14th April 2013, 11:01 pm

A quick note a line in the previous chapter has been revised to “Shingo is off to college and Usagi is on her honeymoon and set to move in with Mamoru. It's just me and Kenji now.”

Now, without further ado, chapter two!




Chapter Two
Good things come in Fours
“You've failed!” shouted the lead Wiseman, standing over a groveling Father Iscariot. “You were supposed to bring us back the girl and instead you return to us empty handed.”

“But, my lord, I have identified the target!” said Iscariot.

“What does it matter to me what you have identified when it is not placed before me!?”

“You believe this 'girl' to be the one we have been searching for?” asked the second Wiseman, flipping through images of Chibimoon's battle with Iscariot.

“When I moved in for the kill there was a blinding white light,” explained Iscariot, “followed by a great surge of power that broke the hold Chaos had placed on the others. Who else could it have been?”

“Our vision showed that the Soldier of the Cosmos will come from the moon,” said the third Wiseman. “It is possible that she could have been this 'Chibimoon' before becoming Sailor Cosmos.”

“So, she finally stopped running,” said the lead Wiseman.

The second Wiseman leaned in to listen to the whispers of the cloaked individual on the throne before looking back to the others, “The High Priest wishes for this girl to be brought to him immediately. Even if she is not the one, a guardian of the future moon can make a valuable bargaining chip.”

“Then you will capture this girl for us, Iscariot,” said the lead Wiseman.

“Yes, my lords!” replied Iscariot. “I will not fail you again!”

“See that you don't,” warned the lead Wiseman.




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Chibiusa was sitting at the desk in her room working on her Pink Moon Stick while the door was slightly pushed open by Diana to allow herself to slip through the crack and enter the princess' room.

“What are you doing, Small Lady?” she asked.

“Close the door!”

Diana closed the door the same way she opened it before jumping up onto Chibiusa's bed to get a closer look at what she was doing.

“Are you sure it's a good idea to have that out?” asked Diana.

“I'm working on it.”

“Whatever for?”

Chibiusa looked over at Diana with a hint of surprise on her face, “Are you serious?”

Diana continued to look on with an innocent and ignorant expression on her face while Chibiusa went back to work on her wand.

“You said this new enemy was able to control your actions?” asked Diana.

“Un huh,” answered a distracted Chibiusa.

“I don't like this. I think we better call the others for help–”

“Got it!”

“Huh?”

Chibiusa stood up from her chair with the wand in hand.

“Pink Sugar Heart–!”

“Small Lady, you can't fire that in here!”

“Attack!”

To both of their surprise a stream of hearts unleashed out of the end of the wand with little to no difficulty. The future princess erupted in cheer as she could hardly believe she actually got it working.

“I did it! I did it! It's working!”

“That's great–! AHH!”

Diana jumped down onto the floor from the bed and hid under it as the stream of hearts sped past her former position on the bed and shattered the glass of the nearby window due to Chibiusa turning. The Pink Moon Stick refused to shut down even at the command of its wielder. As Chibiusa continued to turn, the hearts blasted her work desk before slamming into the wall and rebounding off the wall to the floor.

“Diana, stop this crazy thing!”

“What do you want me to do?”

“Chibiusa, what's going on up there!?” called Ikuko from the floor below.

Chibiusa's eyes widened in panic as she tried desperately to get the wand to stop firing, going as far as to hit it a couple of times until finally, as luck would have it, the stream of hearts came to a halt and Chibiusa hid it under the bed. That didn't really matter as much after she saw what a wreck the room now was in the wake of the wand's outburst. Knowing she had no other way to explain this, the future moon princess hurried over to the door to lean against it to keep Ikuko from opening it.

“Chibiusa?” asked Ikuko from the other side of the door, “are you okay in there?”

“I'm fine! Everything is fine I was just... exercising.”

“Well be more careful!”

“I will be!”

Chibiusa slid down the door and into a sit as a sigh of relief escaped her lips at the sound of Ikuko heading back downstairs.

“That was too close,” said Chibiusa.

“I think now might be a good time to call the others,” said Diana.

“Good idea.”

Chibiusa stood up and walked back over to the bed and taking a seat before pulling out her wristwatch communicator to call the others.

“Guys, this is Chibiusa. Come in.”

But there was no answer.

“Guys, come in. We have a new enemy!”

Still no answer.

“Why won't they respond?” asked Chibiusa.

“Maybe we should check their houses,” suggested Diana.

“All right. Let's go!”

Chibiusa stood up and raced for the door until Diana spoke up again, “Princess, wait!” causing Chibiusa to come to a screeching halt and turn back around to face her cat.

“What?”

“Don't you think we should clean up this mess first?”

Chibiusa looked around the room that was recently trashed by her wand and laughed nervously.

“I'll get the broom.”




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Meanwhile, in the deepest and darkest pits of the cave of Mt. Fuji, Father Iscariot isolated himself from his brethren to think about what his next move would be. The words of the There Wisemen continuing to repeat themselves in his head.

“You've failed,” Iscariot repeated bitterly. “I was doing just fine until that girl managed to break free and heal the others.”

He stared into the black abyss and pressed his hands together before closing his eyes. A quiet chant exited the man's lips and energy flowed through his body and to his hands. Firing out from his fingertips and into the empty space in front of him. The energy came together and created a knight whose armor possessed the same darkness that surrounded him, as if he was born from the shadows themselves. The only light coming from his eyes that sparkled like the stars in the heaven above. The knight was in a kneel before Father Iscariot who was now looking his handy work over, pleased with the results.

“You will seek out the one called Sailor Chibimoon and bring her to me!” demanded Iscariot.

“Yes, my lord,” replied the knight.




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Chibiusa held down on a button on the speaker against the outside wall of Ami's apartment and spoke into it, “Ami-chan? Ami-chan are you there? It's me, Chibiusa.”

Just like on the communicator there was no answer and Chibiusa was starting to get worried.

“She's not home. She's not answering her communicator. Where could they be?”

“Let's try Rei's place next,” suggested Diana.

Chibiusa nodded in agreement and headed over to the nearest bus stop. There she waited on the bench until the bus drove up and she got on. The bus door closing behind her and took off down the road until it reached its designation and Chibiusa got off with a couple of other girls in front of the familiar steps that led up to the Hikawa Jinja. Chibiusa headed up the many quantity of steps, always a good workout, and stopped at the top where she could see the shrine up ahead. A short bald headed man was at the shrine being overly friendly to a couple of the girls there. Chibiusa recognized him as Rei's grandpa, a fun prankster who could always make you smile but knew when to be serious.

“Ohh, now I haven't seen you in a long time,” said Rei's grandpa as he greeted Chibiusa. “You've grown into a pretty young lady. Can I interest you in a part-time job at the temple?”

“Uh... no thanks,” replied Chibiusa. “Is Rei home?”

“No. She's on a cruise with Yuuichirou.”

“C-cruise!?” said Chibiusa surprised

“She had an extra ticket she couldn't let go to waste,” explained Grandpa.

“You wouldn't happen to know where the others are?”

“Hmm, I know Ami is studying abroad. Don't know much about the others.”

“Thank you. That's all I needed to know, I'll be on my way.”

“Care for a good luck charm?”

Chibiusa looked over to the charms and decided to take one in light of recent events and the growing lack of help she had from the others. But before she could take another step she remembered the backpack on her back and the content inside.

“I almost forgot.”

Chibiusa took off the backpack and opened it to reveal the magazines Usagi had borrowed.

“I think Rei is going to want these back.”

Grandpa took the magazines and helped himself as Chibiusa went on her way down the stairs and back to the bus heading for the Aino residence.

Chibiusa walked up to the front porch and knocked on the door. The door came open halfway, held by a chain lock allowing the older blonde with blue eyes to get a look at who was standing outside her door.

“Who is it?” the blonde asked.

“It's Chibiusa. Is Minako home?”

“Minako doesn't live here anymore.”

“Do you know where I can find her?”

“Last I heard she went off rock climbing with her friend Makoto and won't be back for the rest of the week. I can give you her home address in the meantime.”

“That won't be necessary, I won't be staying that long. Thanks anyway.”

“You're welcome.”

Mrs. Aino closed the door and Chibiusa returned to the pavement with Diana at her side. Only having one more place left to check. She went to the outskirts of town and to a large house that resided there. Approaching the front and looking through a window to peek inside, seeing how dark it was on the other side. There was a chance that nobody was home but Chibiusa decided to knock on the door anyway and wait. But alas there was no answer and she was forced to face the cold harsh truth of the situation. She was alone.

Chibiusa headed back into town, nothing but silence between herself and Diana until the guardian cat decided to finally break the silence once they returned to the shopping district.

“Don't worry, Princess, we'll think of something. Princess?”

Diana turned to see Chibiusa staring through the same window that she and Ikuko looked through the other day, the window that had the beautiful pink dress Ikuko was wanting to purchase for her before everything went to hell. The dress was gone. A sold sign hung on the dress stand indicating its purchase.

“Someone must have purchased it after everything calmed down,” said Chibiusa.

“You can get another one.”

“Yeah...”

Chibiusa chose to say nothing more and continued down the pavement, passing by the familiar arcade doors of the Game Center Crown. She saw familiar figures through the glass window of the arcade and stopped to take a second look. Going over to the entrance of the doors that opened automatically as she approached, her eyes going over to one of the arcades to the right to four familiar women in pink, blue, green and red. Cerecere, Pallapalla, Junjun and Vesves. Chibiusa was reminiscent of the first time she met the four before finding out they were their new enemies. It was nice to see them all again. Chibiusa did a double take when she saw what game they were playing.

'Sailor Moon?' she thought.

It was obviously a new game as it was something she'd never seen before. The game had up to five players and she could see Venus, Mercury, Jupiter and Mars on the screen fighting different monsters who appeared to the left and right of the screen. Occasionally a quick animation of the Senshi attacking would appear. Chibiusa wondered what the girls made of this game. She knew Usagi had always wanted to be animated.

“Ooh, pretty animation,” said Pallapalla.

“Vesves, behind you!” said Junjun.

Chibiusa watched as the game's difficulty proved to be a match for the old Sailor V game as the monsters became too much and the health bar for all four Senshi went down to zero. They each expressed a sound of disappointment at the game over screen as Chibiusa chose that time to approach the four.

“Need a hand, ladies?” she asked.

“Chibiusa!” the four exclaimed.

“Spare token?”

Chibiusa was handed a spare token and then entered it into the slot, joining the others in the game as Sailor Moon.

“Do we have time to play games?” questioned Diana but her question went ignored as the five became invested in the game. Diana's attention then went to the glass door as she saw people running by in a panic. Curious, Diana exited the building and looked down the road to see a large knight made of black shadow slowly marching down the street not making so much as a whisper. Diana quickly ran back into the arcade and over to where Chibiusa was.

“Small Lady, there's an–”

“Diana, you're not supposed to talk when we're in–!”

The automatic doors came open, this time allowing entry of the Chaos Knight who's eyes now looked towards the only five girls in the arcade. Bringing up his sheathed sword and slowly brandishing it in front of them.

“Public...”

The five stepped away from the Sailor Moon game and looked towards the knight that was now threatening them.

“What is that?” asked Cerecere.

“It eyes are so pretty,” said Pallapalla.

“Who you trying to scare?” asked Vesves. “I've tamed scarier beasts than you.”

“What are you doing!?” yelled Junjun.

The knight gave no response and raised up his sword, bringing it down in a horizontal swing at the five who were quick to get out of the way causing the sword to slice the arcade game in two. Chibiusa looked around at the other people in the arcade, and lack of places to go to transform. To make matters worse the knight was blocking the entrance of the building so they couldn't retreat to the streets.

“We need to get these people out of here,” said Chibiusa.

“Don't worry about it,” said Vesves.

“You just leave that to us,” said Cerecere.

Chibiusa looked at the two in confusion before looking over to see Pallapalla was already in the process of distracting the knight. Leading him over to the wall on the right-hand side while Junjun unplugged one of the nearby arcade games and brought the cord around the knight's ankles without his knowledge. Once the knight tried to take a step forward he lost his balance and crashed hard into the ground.

“This way, everyone!” called Cerecere to the crowd of people as she and the rest of the Amazoness Quartet led the people to safety, while trampling on the knight in the process.

“Hurry, Small Lady!” said Diana.

Chibiusa looked for a place to transform, her eyes wandering over to the counter and jumping over to the other side to ensure the knight couldn't see her change while he was getting up. Diana hid behind one of the arcades and watched as the knight made it back to his feet and started heading for the exit before Sailor Chibimoon jumped up on the counter behind him.

“Stop right there!” she demanded.

The knight turned around to be in full view of the Sailor Soldier.

“A beautiful girl plays beautiful games. To be pulled away from such a world of fantasy, I can never forgive you! For love and justice – Sailor Chibimoon – in the name of the moon, I'll punish you!”

“Sailor Cosmos,” spoke the knight at last.

A confused Chibimoon looked to the left and right before looking back to the knight and gesturing to herself. And the knight responded by charging full speed ahead at the Senshi, his sword at the ready. Chibimoon went over the knight, grabbing his shoulders and lifting her legs over his head as if she was jumping a vaulting block before landing on her feet behind the knight.

“I think you have me confused with someone else,” said Chibimoon.

The knight spun around and swung his long sword at Chibimoon who moved to the left and right to avoid its sharp edge before leaping back completely to get out of arm's reach of the knight. When the knight closed in again, Chibimoon rolled out of the way of his charge and watched as his sword collided into another arcade game and it proceeded to electrocute him for his troubles. Chibimoon drew her wand and was about to launch an attack of her own, but the knight bounced back quicker than one would have expected and reached out to grab Chibimoon by the throat, lifting her up off her feet and into the air to find...

A fake doll copy of Chibimoon in her stead. At the top of the doll's head was a fuse growing smaller, and smaller until the fuse burnt out and the doll exploded right in the knight's face. The Quartet had returned just in time to pull the old switch-a-roo on the knight as Chibimoon now stood among them.

“You did all that?” asked Chibimoon.

“The explosion should have been bigger,” said Junjun.

“Who asked you!?” said Vesves.

“Look out, it's regenerating!” screamed Diana.

“Told you it should have been bigger,” said Junjun.

Chibimoon took a step forward and held up her Pink Moon Stick before crying out, “Pink Sugar Heart Attack!” Launching the ever so familiar pink hearts at the knight, who unlike past enemies, ran head long into it and repelled the hearts with his sword while cutting the distance between the two, forcing Chibimoon and the Amazoness Quartet to retreat to the outside of the Game Center Crown and onto the streets.

“What do we do now?” asked Cerecere.

“I don't know,” said Chibimoon.

The knight lunged through the air, sword over his head and coming down upon the heads of the girls who jumped out of the way in the nick of time, Chibimoon, Junjun and Vesves jumping to the right while Cerecere and Pallapalla jumped to the left and the knight crashed in the spot they were standing on as his blade created a crack in the ground. The knight turned in Cerecere and Pallapalla's direction and charged towards them, causing Pallapalla to start crying and suddenly...

A blue diamond shaped female symbol appeared on her forehead.

“Pallapalla!” cried out Cerecere, who threw herself between her friend and the knight, unbeknownst to her of the similar symbol on her own forehead only it was pink and shaped more like a hook. She also didn't noticed the barrier that had grown around the two blocking the knight from harming either of them.

“Pallapalla! Cerecere!” said a concerned Chibimoon, Junjun and Vesves in unison.

“What's happening to them?” asked Junjun.

“It looks like...”

Chibimoon turned to face the others and saw a green and red matching symbol on Junjun and Vesves' heads. The former having seven points extending from the top in a star burst and the latter being the most unique of all with a slight curve line up top and two V's stacked on each other, the bottom of which stretched out a little in a straight line at the left and right of it. Diana came out of the arcade to see what was going on and came to a realization.

“The Asteroid Senshi!” she exclaimed.

Jumping up into the air, and spinning around through it, four henshin sticks matching the colors of the Quartet touched the ground underneath after falling from her. Diana landed from her jump and called out to the others.

“Hurry! Take these and transform!”

The knight caught wind of this and began making way for Diana.

“Diana, look out!” yelled Chibimoon.

But it was too late, the knight reached Diana and smacked her across the air and into the nearby building wall.

“DIANA!” screamed Chibimoon.

The others gasped as a wounded Diana shook on the ground. Chibimoon's eyes closed, threatening to burst into tears as her body trembled in anger before she opened them again and held up her Pink Moon Stick.

“I WON'T FORGIVE YOU!”

Through her anger, Chibimoon released an even more powerful version of her Pink Sugar Heart attack that the knight was incapable of combating, sending him flying through the air and crashing into the front of the Game Center where he exploded into shadows. Chibimoon and the Quartet ran over to Diana's position to check on her, Chibimoon dropping to her knees and gently taking Diana into her arms.

“Diana, are you all right?” asked Chibimoon.

“I'm fine,” said Diana weakly.

Chibimoon let out a weak smile, happy that Diana wasn't seriously injured. While she was tending to the cat the shadow warrior she thought dead began to expand over the surface of the Game Center Crown, turning into a large mass of black which began to emerge from the front of the arcade. The Quartet looked up in shock at the horror that was growing from such a peaceful shop before looking back down at Chibimoon.

“Chibimoon!” they said in unison, alerting the Senshi as she looked up to see the warrior herself.

“Transform,” said Diana, again weakly. “You have to transform... Help Small Lady...”

The Quartet picked up the henshin sticks and looked at the others unsure of what to do.

“Hold up your sticks and say the name of your asteroid,” explained Diana. “The rest will come to you...”

The Quartet nodded and then raised their henshin sticks in the air.

“Ceres Power!”

“Pallas Power!”

“Juno Power!”

“Vesta Power!”

“Make up!” they all said near the end in unison.

The customary blinding bright lights surrounded the four as their clothes vanished, flowers plopped up all over Cerecere's body and sprouted to form her sailor fuku of white and pink, white puffed sleeves, white gloves that went to her upper-arms with pink edges at the end, matching knee high boots with pink V-shaped borders and five-pointed star at the top. Pink choker. A gray bow with another pink five-pointed star in the center and a light pink bow at the back. A single vine took the shape of her tiara before forging into such and creating the pink gem at the center.

The more traditional ribbons wrapped around Pallapalla's body to form her fuku. Light blue where Ceres were pink, with a dark blue front bow and pale blue back bow.

Junjun was covered by peacock wings which then transformed to a green and white sailor suit with a brown bow on the front and light green bow on the back.

The henshin stick in Vesves' hand started to burn up until the sacred flames burst forth from the stick and surrounded her body, forging the red and white sailor suit onto her with a black front bow and back light red bow as the four now stood before the monster.

“Sailor Ceres!”

“Sailor Pallas!”

“Sailor Juno!”

“Sailor Vesta!”

“The Sailor Quartet!” the four exclaimed in unison as a pink, blue, green and red explosion erupted behind them as they posed. Chibimoon couldn't believe her eyes, the four people who started out as enemies and turned into friends were now her fellow soldiers, her guardians.

“Where did the explosions come from?” questioned Pallas, looking behind them at the colored smoke now drifting through the air.

Vesta looked over to Juno, “Big enough for you?”

Juno laughed nervously.

“Guys, look!” said Ceres, the four looking up to see the now large shadow creature opening its mouth and giving out a terrifying roar that shook the area around them.

The four came together and held up their arms as if they all had arrows, charging up their power and crying out, “Amazoness Jungle Arrow!” before releasing a massive beam of power head first into the shadow warrior who screamed as soon as the attack hit.

“Now, Sailor Chibimoon!” called Ceres.

“Right!”

After making sure Diana was safe, Chibimoon joined with the others and held up her Pink Moon Stick at the wounded monster with the support of the Quartet.

“Pink Ladies Freezing Kiss!”

A flash of pink light appeared at the battle cry and the shadow warrior froze in place, as if somebody pressed the pause button on its life before the shadow's body cracked and shattered into a million pieces that fell on the ground and dispersed. Upon the monster's defeat the five cheered and came together. Diana smiled at the five, knowing that the princess has finally found her guardians and they were safe. She looked up to the sky and to her surprise she saw what looked to be a woman with wings, pigtails flowing freely through the air atop her head with a trail of golden sparkles following behind her line of flight, and the glow of the sun making her look like an angel looking down from the heavens. Diana didn't know who or what it was, and couldn't make out much more due to how far up they were, but seeing her gave the cat a great sense of...

Serenity.

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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   15th April 2013, 6:18 am

This is still extremely interesting, and the plot seems really well thought out so far. I'm looking forward to reading more! =)
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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   15th April 2013, 7:05 pm

You made me giggle with the scene where Chibiusa was trying to fix her wand. I can totally imagine that scene.

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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   15th April 2013, 7:14 pm

You really capture their personalities so well!
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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   15th April 2013, 7:23 pm

I love reading about Chibiusa on her own. I have always wanted to see her grown up!
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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   15th April 2013, 7:35 pm

I love how you portrayed the quartet! Awesome job!

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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   15th April 2013, 9:50 pm

The Quartet were so much fun to write for. I had just finished watching all their episodes in SuperS so they were still fresh in my mind when I was writing.

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You made me giggle with the scene where Chibiusa was trying to fix her wand. I can totally imagine that scene.

Glad to hear it. I always love to pull a new spin on an old gag.

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I love reading about Chibiusa on her own. I have always wanted to see her grown up!

That was the main inspiration for the fic, as I always wondered what life would be like for her when she got older. The idea just didn't come full circle until I found out about Cosmos and Chaos and read up on them.

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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   17th April 2013, 3:14 am

I really like the set-up so far, and I hope that each of the Sailor Quartet gets her chance to shine. Smile I also hope Helios makes his appearance... and that Chibiusa thinks to contact the Outer Senshi. Heheheh.


Here are some errors I caught while I was reading:

The sounds of footsteps coming down the stairs could be heard from the other side of the door, a light turned on and shinned through the window prior to the door being unlocked and opened slightly.

'shinned' should be 'shined'

“Of course you can. Your old room is still in tact.”

'in tact' should be 'intact'

“I'll try not to wake Shingo”

Add a period at the end of this sentence, please. Smile

“We still have plenty of time,” replied Chibiusa. “Besides, it's better to wait till morning. I can contact the others to help us.”

'till' should be ''til' - 'til is short for 'until'

“Then we will purge Japan of the women,” said the first Wiseman.

'purge Japan of women,' or, 'purge the women of Japan' would sound much better here. The way you wrote it is not necessarily incorrect, but it is somewhat awkward.

Diana jumped down onto the floor from the bed and hid under it as the stream of hearts sped pass her former position on the bed and shattered the glass of the nearby window due to Chibiusa turning.

'pass' should be 'past'

“Ami-chan? Ami-chan are you there? It's me Chibiusa.”

'it's me Chibiusa."' should have a comma between 'me' and 'Chibiusa.' 'it's me, Chibiusa.'

Grandpa took the magazines and helped himself as Chibiusa went on her way down the stairs and back to the bus. Heading for the Aino Residence.

This should probably be one sentence, and I don't think residence should be capitalized. 'Grandpa took the magazines and helped himself as Chibiusa went on her way down the stairs and back to the bus, heading for the Aino residence.'

Reminiscent of the first time she met the four before finding out they were their new enemies.

This doesn't seem like a full sentence. It would probably be better written as, 'Chibiusa was reminiscent of the first time...' etc.

It was obviously a new game as it was something she's never seen before.

'she's' should be 'she'd'

The game had up to five players and she could see Venus, Mercury, Jupiter and Mars on the screen who were fighting different monsters who appeared to the left and right of the screen.

'who were' is unnecessary here.

Occasionally during an attack a quick animation of the Senshi attacking would appear.

'during an attack' is unnecessary.

Curious, Diana exited the building and looked down the road to see a large knight made of black shadow slowly marching down the street not making so much as a whimper.

I think you meant, 'so much as a whisper.'

“A beautiful girl play beautiful games. To be pulled away from such a world of fantasy, I can never forgive! For love and justice – Sailor Chibimoon – in the name of the moon, I'll punish you!”

'play' should be 'plays' and I think that it should be 'I can never forgive you!' but that's debatable. Smile

A blue diamond shaped female symbol appeared on her forehead.

I'm not sure what you mean by 'female symbol' here.

serenity.

This should be capitalized, but you can claim stylistic privilege if you want. Smile

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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   17th April 2013, 2:00 pm

Can I install you?

Thanks. I'm gonna go back and revise these. As for calling the Outer Senshi, not sure what you mean. She did call everyone on her communicator and there was no answer.

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A blue diamond shaped female symbol appeared on her forehead.

I'm not sure what you mean by 'female symbol' here.

I mean it looks like the female gender sign except there's a diamond where the circle should be.

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PostSubject: Re: ToriJ's Sailor Chibi Moon & The Sailor Quartet   24th May 2013, 8:09 pm

Updates

1.) This story can now be found on FanFiction.net. Will appreciate your guys support for it there.

2.) After an unannounced and unplanned hiatus from writing I have resume work on Chapter Three. As always I will publish it on here as soon as it's finished and with any luck I'll be able to write future updates much quicker so people aren't waiting monthly for each chapter.

The only thing that bothers me is FFN erases my **** so now there is no indications of scene changes and the doc won't let me write it in or even space it out more Angry

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