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 Can someone review my Cover Letter, (ASAP?) pretty please? :3

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PostSubject: Can someone review my Cover Letter, (ASAP?) pretty please? :3   Thu Jan 30, 2014 3:52 am

Here is the deal, I suck when it comes to cover letters. I am applying for an IT Systems Analyst position at a community medical college. Any feedback is greatly appreciated. 




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PostSubject: Re: Can someone review my Cover Letter, (ASAP?) pretty please? :3   Thu Jan 30, 2014 4:01 am

I have a few tips for cover letter writing. The cover letter is the perfect opportunity for you to demonstrate your knowledge of the company you are applying for. You need to show in your cover letter that you have researched the company and the position. (Include a relevant fact or incorporate the mission statement of the company into a positive sentence.)
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Also, focus on what you can do for the company, rather than what the company can do for you. Show how you can be an asset for the company. This is not simply parroting what you have accomplished, because your resume does that already. Pay specific attention to the job requirements and include those in there as descriptions of you. I bet you can highlight your senior project and accomplish this at the same time.
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Here is a cover letter tutorial. http://www.gcflearnfree.org/coverletters

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PostSubject: Re: Can someone review my Cover Letter, (ASAP?) pretty please? :3   Thu Jan 30, 2014 4:08 am

I had a feeling you would reply, and I am glad that you did. Thank you so much.

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PostSubject: Re: Can someone review my Cover Letter, (ASAP?) pretty please? :3   Thu Jan 30, 2014 4:11 am

Lol, you know me too well. Although they are usually only a page, cover letters take a deceptively long amount of time to craft well. The more practice and time, the merrier!

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PostSubject: Re: Can someone review my Cover Letter, (ASAP?) pretty please? :3   Thu Jan 30, 2014 4:13 am

So, a good opener would be something like...


"The Common Wealth Medical College has provided the northeast and central areas of Pennsylvania with......"

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PostSubject: Re: Can someone review my Cover Letter, (ASAP?) pretty please? :3   Thu Jan 30, 2014 5:58 am

Can I also recommend you refer to yourself as an alumni and not former student? Former student makes ti sound like you attended but didn't graduate. ^^

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PostSubject: Re: Can someone review my Cover Letter, (ASAP?) pretty please? :3   Thu Jan 30, 2014 6:01 am

I reworked it and my cousin who is an English major, and someone I know who is going to be attending the medical school helped me out a bit too. So it is all good and dandy now... but THAT IS A REALLY GREAT POINT BRITT!

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PostSubject: Re: Can someone review my Cover Letter, (ASAP?) pretty please? :3   Thu Jan 30, 2014 7:19 am

Very Happy Yay! Good luck!

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